Schafdawg's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Stickman Speed Run]

Not that good

It needs some improvement. First of all, stick figures are the lowest form of animation, but are alright if the animation is good enough. He did some cool moves, but they weren't done well enough and it wasn't all that creative. The ending was lame and anticlimactic. He should have gone to the exit and fallen in a pit of spikes or something. It should be at least twice as long. Work on the art and make it a bit more creative and you might be on to something here.

[The Real Legend 4]

Awesome flash for the best game in history

Ocarina of Time is the best game ever and I just love watching parodies of it, especially when they are this good. My only problem is why doesn't Link have the Biggoron sword? He can't just not have it, especially all the way at the Water Temple. Anyways, great flash, awesome comedy, though some parts could have been better. I'm gonna go back and watch the other 3 now.

[School Assignment - Fish]

There is like five songs on out of sinc.

Wow, this is the best TotW that I have seen (look at the reward to understand the acronym). The repeating music is really bad. Handwritten font is cool if it is done well, there is a text tool for flash. The animation is boring, the crack is unexplained and the fishes' color is explained instead. The music, even one layer of it, doesn't represent the flash. Also, consider having the fish bowl explode and have the fish flood out, or something else that would provide some action with this thing.

[Ashton Origans preview]

Best animation???

Well, first of all keep everything in the same medium. Such as, if they are pixels, have a pixel background. A little epic voice acting would do well in the intro thing. Origins is the word you are looking for, Origans sounds like Ashton's last name. It seems like a Sonic type thing without being Sonic. If Robotnik was supposed to be Slovik, you should have changed the sprite. I love sprite-work animation, as I lack drawing skills I would use sprites if I ever made something good enough for the site. This intro needs a bit more, I understand that it is short because it is an intro, but it lacks much of an introduction. Introduce your character a bit more, show him running after Robotnik/Slovik, and add a cool voice reading what you wrote. It shows that you can use flash at a good basic level, and the basics can take you farther than you might think, but they aren't utilized well enough. This doesn't draw in my attention, the name of the flash is rather obscure, and it could use some work. Consider making a new intro flash before launching your series, and you may get a few fans. The problem is that the only good sprite work that I know of is Super Smash Bros Z. Watch them, learn a few things, get pissed because the dude didn't make an ending yet and probably won't, and then start working. One of the most important lessons to learn is to listen to constructive criticism and always read your comments. I wish this series the best, though I'm not sure that it will get too far.

sonicx666666 responds:

Robotnik isn't Slovic (Slavic was his real name i typed it wrong) but Robotnik will be having some recolouring. And Super Mario Bros Z was one of the other animations that inspired me to make this. I wasn't able to voice act because:

1) I don't have a decent microphone or recording program.
2) No one want's to voice act in it.
3) I would voice act as Ashton but i don't have a microphone that records clearly.

Sorry if there is any spelling mistakes my keyboard has some sticky keys and by the looks of it starting to go num.

I'am still practicing my flash.

[StagBeetle Suicide Watch]

Not my kind of flash...

Things materialized, someone killed himself, and... the flower was swaying in a demented manner. That's all I got from this. I hated the music/annoying buzzing noise, it hurt my ears even when the volume was almost nothing. It needs a clear plot, to start with. It also needs animation, mouths that move instead of wiggling... mustaches? It should have voices or sound effects, unless the music is good enough on its own (in this case, screw the music and get voices). The written dialogue was bad, and I don't understand why that Spanish drumstick (I think that is what it was) materialized out of thin air and had bad grammar. I didn't like the flash that much, I didn't see its point, nor do I enjoy the author comments and the four random percent signs. It needs work, but I probably wouldn't like it even with the work done, no offence. Well, not everybody likes everything.

StagBeetle responds:

you're gay

[ball.swf]

Its a great idea, but it needs... more...

The idea is good for a simple flash. The animation is good, the only problem is the fact that it had no color and was quite plain. You also should use sound effects and background music. It was rather short and didn't have much action. It also should have a better beginning, such as the ball being shot out like the pinball shooter (not the flipper). It also needs a clear end, I wasn't sure if the ball made it or not, and if it was destroyed, it should be more grand than it just disappearing. You should make something like this except as a 'domino rig' where you have the seemingly random objects colliding and interacting. It was really good for a basic flash, but sadly it was only a basic flash and needed a bit more.

[The Ballad Of A Turret]

3 days isn't enough

Most good flashes take at least a few weeks of work to be good. The Portal stuff is kinda getting old, and I'm a Portal fanatic. The storyline is kind of lacking, the voices are annoying, and the choppy animation when it was falling and in the flashback was obnoxious. It was good for a 3 day project, however. It has some potential, but needs a bit more work if it is going to be good. Consider making the flashback less of a sideshow and have it animated.

[A Man To Rule Them All]

Umm, please test the flash before submitting it...

Please fix the play button and resubmit the flash. I'm sure that it is really good and awesome, but it doesn't play... At all. I can't really give it a score, but a 0 will have to do. Find out what is wrong, fix it, and resubmit. All I see is the faulty button, the crappy picture at the beginning, and the epic music.